sabtraversa
I tend to aim for the classical poetry; the one with rhymes and recurring amount of syllables, you know. However, I’m too lazy for that amount of perfection.
Plus, I don’t read much and I’m not a native speaker, so I’m at an disadvantage.
Why would I write poems in English then? It makes me focus on the spelling, grammar and vocabulary, therefore it works as a way for me to detach emotionally.
Also, it’s a language that, the majority of people I know in person, can’t speak. It’s like writing on a journal with your secret alphabet. Google Translate sucks anyway.
Proton and Electron
This is the story of an electron
that fell in love with a proton.
A very strong attraction
that soon became an obsession.
Running, running around,
to this fate she was bound,
unable to hold excitement
or stop for a moment.
Stuck, stuck in the middle,
the proton was a riddle,
calling for his lover
but never let her come closer.
Kept apart by a mysterious force,
coming from an unknown source.
There was nothing they could do,
except waiting for a breakthrough.
All that was left was to pray,
one day the electron was pushed away.
She smiled and thought it was a miracle,
but she was only attracted by another particle.
Then another bond had begun,
she hoped he was the one.
But no, the story was the same
because that was the electron’s fate.
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Question of
Do you like writing poetry?
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Yes
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No
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Question of
If you do, do you usually compose in your native language?
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Yes
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No
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Question of
Do you like reading poetry? (Be honest)
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Yes
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No
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I love writing poetry, I write mostly romantic poetry. I love the light airy style of your poem.
I write when I feel inspired to write
It’s the best way, inspiration makes writing fun and keeps you focused. ?
I do like writing poetry just when i get urge to do so
It’s like painting, it is best to be done while you are in the right mood. ?
Quantum romance? A tale of strange attractors…
Yes, that’d be a good title, though it creates a lot of ‘hype’. ?
you put an interesting SPIN on things, quite CHARMing
You really need to write more things and put on here. This is great.
Thank you very much! ?
I would love to get into to poetry, but as of late I have been lazy with attempting to put things together.
I get inspired and motivated quite randomly, I haven’t been writing poetry for years, I feel you. The worst thing to do with these things is to force them, hopefully you’ll get in the mood soon. ?
I have a book somewhere on my book shelf with poetry that inspired me after I bought it. Once I take it off of my shelf, I’m sure that inspiration will hit me again. Currently bogged down in my semester : )
Wow. A nice attempt in marrying science and poetry. Really enjoyed it Sabtraversa.
Thank you, indeed! ?
You have my praise for your poem. I have no idea that you also like writing poetry! And this is beautiful poetry! Yes, I love poetry too.
Aww, thank you, Albert! ? I used to write more often when younger, but I’ve felt inspired lately. Poetry helped me a lot in improving my English skills. ?
May you continue to be inspired!
Yes, by reading we learn. You are doing great.
Reading is something I’ve been procrastinating for a while, but thank you! ?
I love poetry, but I think I enjoy it the most in my native language.
Aww, thank you! ?
To be honest, I do not like poetry dear friend
It’s okay, I’m glad you’re honest about that. ?
Why would something pretend … I hope there’s nothing wrong with this dear friend
Science poems, such as this one are hard. But this is not a sad bad poem. It has a lot of positive points (protons) and a couple of negative points (neutrons). Nicely done!
Hehehe, that’s true! ? Thank you. ?