MommyofEli2013
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Here is another poem that I wrote and wanted to share with you all. I wrote this many years ago…I would love to know what you all think of it.
Intersection of Strangers
Andrew picked up the knife
wanted to end his life
screaming out for someone’s care
reaching out but no one was there
Katy packed her bags in the car
Drove way out of town
tried to get as far as she could
her family never knew she would
Andrew drew his life story
All over his own skin
He thought that no one would care
they would never listen
Katy kept driving further,
Unsure of where she would go
Drive way beyond the horizon
No one would ever even know
Andrew was tired of being alone
He needed something to drown the pain
So he walked into town,
In the pouring rain
Katy did not see the stop sign as she was speeding by
and her life flashed right before her eyes
Andrew lain there on the gravel,
Barely conscious, in front of her car
The ambulance came and Katy was gone
They took Andrew to the hospital
Where he lived his last day,
and then to heaven he moved on
Your rhyme is really good and a theme is on the spot. Nice.
Thank you very much!
Wow this really drew me in Courtney. The format looks good to me.
The words are so real, I can relate in so many ways. The darkness revealed.
Thank you very much. I used to write a lot of stuff like this…to help me get through things.
The format is better than others I have posted, but there was supposed to be a space after every 4th line.
I don’t know why you think it is not perfect just the way it is. Life is not perfect and neither is death. I love it just the way it is.
well thank you, I appreciate your feedback! I’m glad you like it the way it is….I just wish it posted the way I submitted it!
Nice photo and nice poema.
Thank you very much, I”m glad you like it
Format is almost there, but still not perfect. If anyone knows how to fix that, I’d love to know!